Magazine Reflection Part 2

Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what improved? How did it get better? Why?

• I think that my structure has improved the most. I see my paper as more organized now. Before when i used to write papers it was so unorganized and when i wrote my ideas would be all over the page. Another thing that has improved for me was my sentence structure. I learned a lot of different techniques used in writing like not using a lot of ing's , start off strong and end off strong. Another technique I learned was avoiding sledge hammer words. When I would get my paper critiqued I noticed that there were a lot of unnecessary wording.
  

Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why?

• I think the overall message of my paper could have improved, I should have worked on that more. Maybe having a more detailed brain storm would have helped.
  

Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.

• Something that improved on my article was my intro. When I first wrote my intro it was so long, but after getting it critiqued by one of my fellow class mates it became much more shorter but still had the same meaning.The very first sentence of my article got much more shorter but still conveyed the message I was trying to say. Which was,
  

Before; "Being a Junior at High Tech High Media Arts requires that you complete an internship.
After;"Juniors at High Tech High Media Arts must complete and internship.

& minor word changes like the one shown above is what makes an article better.

• Another sentenced that I saw change drastically;
  

Before; "In January we had our interviews that would help the school place us in our internships.
After; "In January, we had our interviews for internship placement.

4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.

• I learned the,concert not pancakes method, writing style. This method of starting off strong and ending strong helped a lot during revisions of my article. Another method learned that I liked a lot was,using few -ing's. In my intro i have only one ing, which is not that bad I think. Sentence structure was one I focused on the most. When I write my sentences I will sometimes use words that don't need to be there. So sentence structure has helped a lot it made my sentences short & detailed.